This query is from Beckahrah for the novel Eyes of Stone. Thank you Beckahrah for the honour of allowing me to work on and post this!
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ORIGINAL QUERY
Anaiiya's always known she's human. Even living among the last of the gargoyles, the certain knowledge of who and what she is has always been with her. But when a deranged queen who sees only traitors in every non-human species launches an attack on the gargoyle tribe, Anaiiya discovers a dark truth: There's a monster inside her waiting for the right trigger to free itself. Seeing her family assaulted, she blacks out--and awakens covered in the blood of thirty men, with no memory of how it happened.
Now the river boils when she sings and drops of blood show her visions only she can see. The monster within, the thing she's becoming, overwhelms her with a bloodthirsty darkness that demands to be sated. She fights against it and turns her newfound powers to defending her beloved tribe.
But Anaiiya's attempts to protect her family draw the attention of far more dangerous creatures than a mad queen and her militant army. Using the gargoyles as pawns, immortal beings of dark magic war for control of Anaiiya's powers. Because of Anaiiya, the last gargoyle tribe is in greater danger than ever and only she can save them--if the darkness growing like a cancer within her soul doesn't destroy them first.
EYES OF STONE is a 109,000 fantasy.
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GOBLIN-EDIT
Even living among the last of the gargoyles, Anaiiya has always known she's human. It's what she didn't know that may destroy her. When a deranged queen attacks the gargoyle tribe, Anaiiya blacks out--and awakens drenched in the blood of thirty men.
Now the river boils when she sings and drops of blood show her visions. The monster she is becoming overwhelms Anaiiya with a lust for violence, but all she wants is to use her newfound powers to defend her tribe.
Instead, Anaiiya's attempts to protect her family draw the attention of more dangerous creatures. Immortal beings of dark magic war for control of Anaiiya's powers, and the last gargoyle tribe is in greater danger than ever. Anaiiya can save them--but only if the darkness growing like a cancer within her doesn't destroy them first.
EYES OF STONE is a 109,000 word fantasy.
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