This query is from Rewrighter for the novel Saving Andromeda. Thank you Rewrighter for the honour of allowing me to work on and post this!
When Emma Hudson turns 18, her parents share three shocking revelations: Emma was adopted. Her biological father is internationally famous folk rocker Michael Fletcher. And her birth mother is a convicted killer named Andromeda Bain.
For a girl with her future mapped out, this knowledge blows Emma's plans apart. She ditches her summer job to embark on a cross-continental quest and track down her roots. Traveling from her home in southeast Alaska to California and Nova Scotia, Emma learns her family tree includes unknown relatives, hidden relationships and simmering feuds stretching back three generations. As Emma discovers the true passion of her parents' romance, she also realizes Andromeda did not commit the 19 year-old crime. But with a hostile crew of new relatives who'd rather sweep family secrets under the hooked kitchen rug, finding the truth is as elusive as filling a jar with fog. And the real killer is watching Emma's every move.
When Emma Hudson turns 18, her parents blow her well-mapped future apart with three revelations: Emma was adopted, her biological father is an internationally famous folk rocker, and her birth mother is a convicted killer.
Emma ditches her summer job so she can find out who she really is. Traveling from Alaska to California to Nova Scotia, Emma discovers unknown relatives, hidden relationships and feuds that stretch back three generations. When Emma learns the true scope of her parents' passion, however, she also realizes her mother didn't commit the 19 year-old murder. Despite a hostile crew of new relatives who'd rather sweep family secrets under the hooked kitchen rug, Emma [does something specific] to clear her mother's name. But the real killer has been watching Emma's every move, and [Emma winds up in the book's most dangerous situation.] [In the final sentence, describe what she must do to survive but don't say how she does it--give us a cliffhanger ending. Make sure the stakes are clear also, i.e. "She must do [x] or [y] will happen."]
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