This query is from an anonymous author for a novel called Redemption for Liars. Thank you, anonymous author, for the honour of allowing me to work on and post this!
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ORIGINAL QUERY
Jonah’s new girlfriend, the suspect of his undercover investigation, just buried her deadbeat husband. Or so he thought.
FBI Agent Jonah White just threw away a promising career to find justice for his sister’s murder. But with the suspected killer already six feet under, Jonah will wine and dine the grieving widow, Maya Savantes, to recover his sister’s missing inheritance. Working undercover is never easy, but falling in love with Maya, a possible accomplice to murder, definitely wasn’t part of the plan. As Jonah delves deeper into Maya’s life, he discovers two things: 1) there’s a pissed off, trigger happy loan shark who assumes Maya has the fifty grand her husband stole – the very same money Jonah’s been searching for, and 2) Maya’s husband isn’t so dead after all.
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GOBLIN-EDIT
FBI Agent Jonah White threw away a promising career to find justice for his sister’s murder. However, with the suspected killer already six feet under, all Jonah can do now is wine and dine the man's grieving widow, Maya Savantes, to recover the $50,000 inheritance her husband stole from Jonah's sister.
Working undercover is never easy, but falling in love with Maya--a possible accomplice to the murder--definitely wasn't part of the plan. As Jonah dances around Maya's suspicions and his own feelings, he learns two things, (1) there's a pissed off, trigger-happy loan shark willing to put both Maya and Jonah in his sights to get the inheritance money, and (2) Maya's husband isn't as dead as everyone assumed.
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