Wednesday, February 13, 2013

Shuttered!  
Due to this site being veeeery quiet (to the point I occasionally forget it exists) I've decided to officially shutter the Query Goblin blog. I will no longer be massaging queries here. 

Thanks to everyone who has participated, and best of luck in your querying!

Saturday, February 2, 2013

Query #54: YA Fantasy by Anonymous

This query is for a YA Fantasy from an anonymous writer. Thank you, Anonymous, for the honour of allowing me to work on and post this!

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ORIGINAL QUERY

Seventeen-year-old Ivy Chapel doesn’t realize she’s an archangel with amnesia who unknowingly possesses the healing power for all mankind. While trying to remember her past, Ivy must guard her heart and soul against the enemies standing in her way.

Fairy tales and folklore. That’s what it sounds like to Ivy when her parents’ new tenant, handsome and arrogant William, tells the strangest story about an angel being hidden on Earth in the form of a baby. A child forced by her spiritual parents to remain human until the rebellion of Lucifer ended, making it safe for her to return home.

But something went terribly wrong. Ivy was left stranded on Earth and now finds herself the target of a very dangerous demonic being, Lucian. Lucian’s charming, sophisticated and he has orders to kill Ivy and take possession of her healing power so he and his legion, The Fallen, can finally extinguish the human race.

William is the warrior angel sent to protect Ivy. He is also her true love, created to be by her side for eternity. Unable to reveal who or what he is, William is painfully aware that if he fails to shield Ivy she will be lost to him forever.

Falling under Lucian’s spell, Ivy resists William’s efforts to befriend her and ignores the emotions he constantly stirs in her. Ivy finds herself caught between William’s true love and her misplaced loyalty to Lucian.

William wants her heart. Lucian wants her soul. Will she be able to survive them both and save the world?

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GOBLIN-EDIT

Seventeen-year-old Ivy Chapel doesn’t realize she’s an archangel with amnesia, but her parents’ new tenant, the handsome and arrogant William, just told her the strangest story of an angel hidden on Earth to keep her healing powers safe until Lucifer's rebellion ends.

William is the warrior angel sent to protect Ivy, but also her true love, created to be by her side for eternity. Unable to reveal what he is, William is painfully aware he could lose Ivy forever. She's falling under the spell of Lucian, a charming demonic being with orders to kill Ivy and take her healing power so he and his legion, The Fallen, can finally extinguish the human race.

Caught between William’s true love and her misplaced loyalty to Lucian, Ivy resists William’s efforts to befriend her and ignores the emotions he constantly stirs in her. William wants her heart. Lucian wants her soul. Will she be able to survive them both and save the world?

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