This query is from an anonymous author for a (YA, I think) novel with a secret title. Thank you, Anonymous, for the honour of allowing me to work on and post this!
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ORIGINAL QUERY
As the only human and female in a pack of werewolves, Danika Keller has never felt like she belonged. Ever since she watched the class pet die and felt its bones breaking as if they were under her own skin. She hasn’t fit in at school or at home.
When she meets a mysterious boy with a healing touch and a starving mountain lion talks to her, Dani begins to suspect she is something more than human.
But nothing could have prepared her for the truth – Dani is heir to the Animal Kingdom and is the key to ending a deadly thousand-year feud. Now Dani will discover how far she will go to save a broken realm and those she cares about, from an evil court and . . . choose between the love of two boys; a Prince whose marriage to will help end the war or a werewolf who has sworn to serve her.
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GOBLIN-EDIT
As the only human in a pack of werewolves, Danika Keller just doesn't belong. But when she meets a boy with a healing touch, and a starving mountain lion talks to her, Dani realizes she's more than she ever suspected.
Dani is heir to the Animal Kingdom. If she [doesn't get involved in stopping their big feud], [something awful happens, preferably to someone she has grown to like]. Dani [does something to try to help the situation], but [something goes wrong with that plan, which makes things worse.] She [tries something else to make things better], but [obstacles again arise, again making the situation even more dangerous.]
Now, Dani must [make some horrible choice or place herself/her loved ones in danger] or [something really awful happens to both her and her loved ones.]
(See the comments section for my suggestions on how to fill in the blanks!)
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