This query is from Leigh Carron for the novel Fat Girl! A Love Story. Thank you, Leigh Carron, for the honour of allowing me to work on and post this!
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ORIGINAL QUERY
Life isn’t perfect. But, for Child Advocate, Deeana Chase it’s tracking along nicely. She loves her work, the little house she’s bought near the lake, and her two amazing best friends. And finally, after years of heartache and soul searching, Dee has buried her past and made a tenuous peace with food, her body… and herself.
Until...
Her ex, the very sexy and now famous Micah Peters appears out of the blue unearthing old ghosts and unlocking long held secrets. Plunged into her worst nightmare, Dee finds herself torn between professional duty and self preservation. In helping his twelve-year-old nephew caught in a custody battle, she must resist the one man who once had the power to nearly destroy her.
Only…
A food compulsion proves easier to control than her desire for Mick. But as Dee gives into sensual temptation, she is forced to uncover some startling truths about Mick and herself. Will the truth set her “fat girl” free or will insecurities forever keep her heart imprisoned?
This powerfully erotic and moving story about united lovers takes you on an exciting journey to answer the age-old question, can love conquer all.
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GOBLIN-EDIT
Life isn’t perfect, but for Child Advocate Deeana Chase, it’s tracking along nicely. She loves her work, the little lake house she just bought, and her two amazing best friends. And -- finally -- Dee has made a tenuous peace with food, her body, and herself.
But that peace is threatened when a twelve-year-old she's helping through a custody battle proves to be the nephew of her ex, the very sexy and now famous Micah Peters. Micah's words once had the power to destroy Dee, but a food compulsion is easier to control than her desire for this man. Torn between professional duty and self-preservation, Dee starts to give in to sensual temptation.
But in doing so, she uncovers startling truths about Micah and herself. Will the truth set her “fat girl” free, or will insecurity forever imprison Dee's heart?
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Goblin Caveat: Some elements that may not be accurate for the novel have been added to this edited version of the query.
